Hey guys I wish that you have liked my story till chapter 2.
Now I am going to write the 3rd chapter
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3.Vane tells story to Osborn
After Vini Man and Vini Bond's ghost took Vane back to home, Vane sraight away went to Osborn's office.
"Sir,I saw 4 dead bodies as they were moving in their house"
"What? 4 dead bodies were moving?"
"Yes sir" replied Vane
"O.K, Tell me full story what happened there"
"I was sitting on the bed.I heard a voice of bomb blast and I came out from my house and saw that my neighbour's house was burning.Then I called a fire brigade and then and they poured water on the house and after 1 hour the fire was extinguished.Then I went to my neighbour's house and I saw that there were 4 dead bodies and then they were slowly slowly standing up and then they all came around me and then I ran from there and came here.
This happened there."
"O.K. Thanks for telling me. Now go to home" replied Osborn
"O.K Sir" replied Vane and went to his home
28 comments:
apart from some grammatical mistakes, your writings are good.. keep it up!!
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Hmmmph ! nice one buddy !
short one...prone to grammatical mistakes...which is understandable...waitin for the next..
well done..special effort indeed.
nice one
didnt read other chap but this seemed interestin
awww
nice but bits and pieces
gud wrk !
nice design !! really nice one !!
now tat i read other posts too.... nice work
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well u r keeping the interest going
good one
keeep it coming
Yo.. kiddo... u writing too good.... keep it up dear....
incomplete one....
complete it fully on one post...
your writing was nice..i enjoyed it :)
when in the next one coming...get it out soon!! waitin!!! waitin!!
very good yaar, great design.You are doing a very good job, keep it up.
good one. :)
For someone as young as you, this is tremendous! Well done!
heyy!! ur so young but u write realli well! keep posting, i want more of vini man^_^
P.S: my young bro who is ten luvs ur stories!!
pal...considering ur age ur doing cool job...nice work nice stories..but me found ur work too piecy..like too small...gotto suffice both length n matter wise...
all in all..good job ...keep it up
great going dude......
really very interesting...!!
But for a few typos and spellos, Your story is building up well.
The characters and storyline are a bit out of context (Could have been better if it was written in regional context) but hey Kudos to your imagination.
Regards,
Jude
good try..
sure dude.blogrolled u.
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Hey buddy.. You are suprisingly too young to write that well.. Great going dude!! Keep it up.
Okay, you're on my blogroll.
is this story inspired by some action movie???
how can a 9 year old rite about dead bodies and stuff???
i think ur missing out on play and studiess...concentrate nore on dat...
nice !
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