I think u have enjoyed the 1st chapter not very much but this is better than it.
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2.The Burning House.
At home Vane said to Vini Man's and Vini Bond's ghost that "Hey you two come down.You know I got a new boss.His name is Osborn"
When he said this there had been a bomb blast but not in Vane's house but in his neighbour's house.He came out of his house and saw that the whole house was burning.Then all the people of colony came out. "Who burned this house and who kept bomb in it" thought Vane
Then Vane called a Fire Brigade.When the fire brigade cam Vane said to them "Hey, please water this house" They started watering the house and after 30 minutes the fire was extinguished.Then Vane got into the house and he saw that there were 4 dead bodies and slowly-slowly the dead bodies were standing up.One dead body came near to Vane from his back.One came from his front and two came from the right and left direction.Vane was totally scared.At home Vini Man's and Vini Bond's ghosts were finding him.They went outside of the house and they saw that their neighbour's house was without fire and they got know that Vane will be in that house only.They went in that house and saw 4 dead bodies around Vane. "Oh Vane you are here and we were finding you in the home" said Vini Man's ghost "Shut Up!!! Can't you see that 4 shosts are around me" replied Vane in fear "O.K. we are coming to take you"said Vini Man's ghost and took Vane to his house.
30 comments:
gud work...keep it up
and now the twist is ghosts...!
was waiting from a long time
found " water the house" too hilarious..!
nice one buddy.... its a series or sumthin???
@dina
it's a series.
good one
plz dun keep us waitin
hmm gud one
good work there kid...
awsome.. keep the series gin..
interesting one !!
It is amazing to see such beautiful words from a 9 yrs old kid !
gr8 man !!
keep it up !!
keep posting ~~
\m/
good one mate
I like the vino bond ghost idea
ha ha...hmmm..so the new one up haan..good job bro!
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You have a good story here but your writing skills needs a little push up. At downloadfreesongs.info I talk to my readers so that I grab their attention. Instead of using "Vane was totally scared" you can use "Vane was grasping for breath and trembling with fear" this grabs attention and makes story more interesting. My 2 cents.
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interesting one !!
keep posting !!
good post man
keep it up buddy.. hope u make it big in the future,
well u've started early!!
hehe its soo cool.. and nice..
continue to blog..
will come back for more..
thts pretty gud !
cheers !!
nice blog, you have designed it very well.
nice post....
series eh?
btw wats blog roll?
when is the next season coming??
couldn;t make much of it, then read through the first chapter to find out that it is pending :-D
Vini...Hmmm..
anyway, will get back to this one later..
yeah ..whens next season commin?
update ur blog man...
i am getting hold of it now..well done . rock on!
out of words......just keep it up !
hey.. slow down on commenting on orkut if you can't update the blog fast enough..
lage raho!!
already commented in all your post so commenting again on this post
Bacha keep blogging !!
good yaar
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