August 03, 2008

Vini Man and Vini Bond 3:Chapter 3

Hey guys I wish that you have liked my story till chapter 2.
Now I am going to write the 3rd chapter
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3.Vane tells story to Osborn

After Vini Man and Vini Bond's ghost took Vane back to home, Vane sraight away went to Osborn's office.
"Sir,I saw 4 dead bodies as they were moving in their house"
"What? 4 dead bodies were moving?"
"Yes sir" replied Vane
"O.K, Tell me full story what happened there"
"I was sitting on the bed.I heard a voice of bomb blast and I came out from my house and saw that my neighbour's house was burning.Then I called a fire brigade and then and they poured water on the house and after 1 hour the fire was extinguished.Then I went to my neighbour's house and I saw that there were 4 dead bodies and then they were slowly slowly standing up and then they all came around me and then I ran from there and came here.
This happened there."
"O.K. Thanks for telling me. Now go to home" replied Osborn
"O.K Sir" replied Vane and went to his home

28 comments:

Attila said...

apart from some grammatical mistakes, your writings are good.. keep it up!!

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Angel said...

Hmmmph ! nice one buddy !

Sandeep Balan said...

short one...prone to grammatical mistakes...which is understandable...waitin for the next..

abymittal said...

well done..special effort indeed.

parth said...

nice one
didnt read other chap but this seemed interestin

peter said...

awww
nice but bits and pieces
gud wrk !

Gagan said...

nice design !! really nice one !!

parth said...

now tat i read other posts too.... nice work

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alex paul k said...

well u r keeping the interest going
good one
keeep it coming

*KHUSHI* said...

Yo.. kiddo... u writing too good.... keep it up dear....

sour said...

incomplete one....

complete it fully on one post...

your writing was nice..i enjoyed it :)

Sandeep Balan said...

when in the next one coming...get it out soon!! waitin!!! waitin!!

Siddharth Bose said...

very good yaar, great design.You are doing a very good job, keep it up.

Abhinav Viswambharan said...

good one. :)

Dame Folle said...

For someone as young as you, this is tremendous! Well done!

Sidrah said...

heyy!! ur so young but u write realli well! keep posting, i want more of vini man^_^

P.S: my young bro who is ten luvs ur stories!!

Arya said...

pal...considering ur age ur doing cool job...nice work nice stories..but me found ur work too piecy..like too small...gotto suffice both length n matter wise...
all in all..good job ...keep it up

Sriram said...

great going dude......

Abhinav said...

really very interesting...!!

JudeTheObscure said...

But for a few typos and spellos, Your story is building up well.

The characters and storyline are a bit out of context (Could have been better if it was written in regional context) but hey Kudos to your imagination.


Regards,

Jude

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Dushyant said...

Hey buddy.. You are suprisingly too young to write that well.. Great going dude!! Keep it up.

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RINZU SUSAN RAJAN said...

is this story inspired by some action movie???

how can a 9 year old rite about dead bodies and stuff???


i think ur missing out on play and studiess...concentrate nore on dat...

Dan* said...

nice !