January 24, 2010

Larry Bloyd Part II

Hello everybody.This post is for a sequel of a story written by me.To see the first part see this post - Larry Bloyd I

Larry Bloyd, still in 6th class, failed 3 times and now ragging juniors and getting ragged by seniors. The new principal of the school, Mr Joseph made a rule that no one will go to the toilet during classes. To see that no one goes to the toilets during classes he had set some cameras in the school, also in the boy's toilets which gets switched off during the breaks.Larry missed doing toilet in the lunch break and now was stopping his urine.He thought that he can't stop it till the last period so he thought to get out of the class quietly.And he even succeeded in his plan.He was running to the toilet but in between a teacher stopped him and asked him to bring some notebooks from a class.Larry said "I don't have time to do all these stupid things" and pushed the teacher into the girl's toilet and ran from there.Then a senior stopped him and asked for some money,Larry Bloyd showed him his middle finger and ran as fast as he can.He got into the toilet.When he looked back,out of the toilet he saw that the principal was taking rounds of school.So he stood up and went to the commode.He touched his pant to open the zip.He felt something wrong.He looked down and he saw that his pant was wet.



Tell me how was the story by commenting.In the end I want to wish Orkut a happy birthday.Orkut is 6 year old now.


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22 comments:

Gautam Mathu said...

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mr.weirdo!! said...

ha ha ... but its ok only

Aditya Aima said...

OK hai...improve it..

sanz360 said...

hey...i gotta say from soneone as young as you...this piece shows great potential...in all fairness...the tale needs some further strengthening even if you do intend to keep it to just this one scene... perhaps you need to build the tension a little more...so that the the near miss with the commode can seem all the more sad...

just trying to give you some constructive criticism...but as i said... you've done a good job...keep posting!

~Sanz

Zanil Hyder said...

Larry Bloyd was in heights of tolerance i suppose.

you could still improve on it.

√ij@y said...

Ok.........nice..
Keep it up
:)

milind said...

its nice...... but can't enjoying much somwat improvement has to do
but overall performance is very good

Sasikumar said...

it's awesome to see a 11 yr old blogger. i had not touched a computer when i was 11! best wishes to u! keep the good work going!

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Rohan said...

Next time ask the principle to supply diapers :P:P

Nice to see an 11 year old blogger, keep it up !

Cheers

Arjun Chauhan said...

gr8 buddy!

sumanyu said...

nice

suyash said...

hey dude!
good going

u talked of blog roll
m ready
heres my blog
http://suyash-srivastava.blogspot.com/

Amit said...

nice story i not read all but its intresting and i like i think u rock and next time u will do some other story in ur blog all the best

MaC said...

nice bro, keep it up... :)

shaikna said...

ur creativity is ggggg8888888888

Suraj said...

Really nice nice story bro..u r a good writer

Muhammad Ahmed said...

its kooooooooooooool

vinayak said...

gud yaar..........
nice story ............

vinayak said...

gud yaar..........
nice story ............

Rohit Rajpal said...

Oops sorry Orkut.....

Haapy Belated Birthday!

:P

krishna said...

YEH! great short story nd the middle finger part awsome
keep writting